Thursday, February 22, 2007

Rhyme and no rhythm

I have been a bad friend
Done things I cannot mend
Damn, I didn't want that to rhyme
Now I'm left with a poem that's turning into a mime!

Since am a poet bad
I'll give an explanation tad
Coarse dialogues and actions too
If that's not a mime pray tell me what else will do!

So I've broken words and hearts of course
And absolutely no remorse!

Its a habit me thinks
This breaking things and needless rhyme
Now that I thought I almost had it there
Bang it goes and stops that flow fine!

Its like silly doodles one draws
On late night long distance calls
When the cost exceeds the words
This bugging random verse
One cant stop and it gets just worse!

I think I am a feminine rhyme,
Putting everything in trouble
And in quantities that's but double.
No more of this next time!
(See it does rhyme with rhyme!)


27 Comments:

Anonymous Anonymous said...

Haha, this is terrible :p

11:00 PM  
Blogger Mrs. Dalloway said...

Learner: Lol! I know!

11:04 PM  
Anonymous Anonymous said...

peach of a snap....poornima..

2:38 AM  
Anonymous Anonymous said...

Not bad!

10:10 AM  
Anonymous Anonymous said...

:)
Intelligent.... :)

9:19 PM  
Blogger A Liberated Soul said...

Nice try...

9:40 PM  
Blogger Jolly said...

Your blog rocks, I am an instant fan !

12:17 AM  
Anonymous Anonymous said...

The Million Dollar Question:

How Much Time in Your Precious Life Did You Take To Write this Wonderful (!) Peice?

pssst: the million dollars will not be sent to you!

love,
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2:04 AM  
Blogger Rajesh said...

Thats worse than kakoli's couplets..LOL

9:06 AM  
Blogger BaKfIrE said...

Pls dont try to change...it hurts...us badly :)

4:03 AM  
Blogger clash said...

I felt...i am in Punjab.. Am i hearing the verses of Chamkeela!!

4:05 AM  
Blogger rākeśvara said...

IMveryveryHO

Smart but not Sensitive
Beautiful not; though Creative

See..
stupid poetry is contagious

2:44 PM  
Blogger Sowmya said...

poornima...whats happening????? where are u?
love,
Sowmya

2:00 AM  
Anonymous Anonymous said...

You do justice to the whole concept of blogging... :)

Priya

12:15 AM  
Blogger Pritika Gupta said...

happy women day

10:40 PM  
Blogger Unknown said...

Hi Poormina, Nice to see ur blog...Intresting.., U seems to be same kind of me... Nice meeting u my frd do keep n touch...

Nalla oli vattam theriyum pola ungakita...

sureshvijay123@gmail.com s mine.. do keep in touch

8:58 PM  
Blogger Shikha said...

ur blog is great..i love the way u write..this is not my first time here..i come here more than once in a while..but u dont see my comments that many times cos i feel odd to go 'wow..nice post' very single time..and so i decided to comment only now and then..hopefully my next comment wont be as verbose:)

5:37 PM  
Anonymous Anonymous said...

Poornima's blog: Me thinks that there is definitely someone else..
Poornima: Nooo!.. I already told you there isint, sweetheart!
Poornima's blog: (Sobbing) NOOOOO.. I know.. there is someone else.. its been so long.. (still sobbing)

-Reva
come on.. update more often :)

3:31 PM  
Anonymous Anonymous said...

It is love at first reading with ur blog.. u definitely will be in my rss list.

2:32 PM  
Blogger VENKIE said...

whoa! puhleeeez!!! you are better at prose.

5:54 AM  
Blogger Mrs. Dalloway said...

To all: Am sorry about that! for the 'poetry', delay and this common comment! Its a Frankfurt nightmare!

6:31 AM  
Anonymous Anonymous said...

Hahahaha! I like the continually self-aware, self-deprecating irony and humour of this poem! and I like the analogies you've used.

12:26 AM  
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